Bike trip on Pacific Coast ~ First week~

Bike trip on Pacific Coast ~ First week~

I started to travel with my cool bicycle on ____the Pacific Coast from Vancouver in Canada to Border Field State Park in Califolrnia. ____(On) The first week, I planed to go from Vancouver to Astoria with watching seeing beautiful beachs__.



____(On) The first day of this week, I went to the sunset beach in Vanouver.This beach is more beautiful than ___________ I have seen saw before. After all Finally, I stayed there for two days since there is very beautiful place.




Then I visited the Alki beach in Seattle on the third day. The conbinations of beach and sunset is awesome.



Finally, I arrived at the Cannon beach end of the week. This beach especially has the {big rock} and ___the very beautiful sunset, and I may never forget the taste of beer with sunset there.



Tatsuya

Thanks for your post - it is very thorough and thoughtful! Don't forget to add the words we discussed on Monday, as well as your name.

My corrections:
Red words = delete
Blue words = problem of vocabulary
Green words = problem of tense, form, or spelling
Underlined = problem of capitalization
{Brackets} = reorder, reorganize, or reword

Let me know if you have any questions!

Kate